Phân tích bài flowchart band 9

Salmon begin life as eggs on a pebbly riverbed, hidden among reeds in the slow-moving upper reaches of a river. After five to six months the eggs hatch into 'fry'. For approximately the next four years, these baby salmon will live in the lower, faster-flowing waters of their river. During this time they measure between three and eight centimeters in length.

By the time salmon reach twelve to fifteen centimeters, they are termed 'smolt', and at this time they migrate further downriver into the open sea. After five years at sea the salmon will have grown to adult size, which is between seventy and seventy -six centimetres. They then begin swimming back to their birthplace, where they will lay their eggs, and the cycle stars anew.

In summary, the salmon passes through three distinct physical stages as it grows to maturity. Each of these stages takes place in a very different aquatic location. It is noteworthy that the first two stages of this fish 's life occur in a freshwater environment, while the third stage is lived in saltwater.

Phân tích

Writing task completion

First section describes the first phase of the salmon growth

The second section describes the growth of salmon the second and third phase

Third paragraph outlines the characteristics of the full life cycle of salmon
Coherence and Cohesion

after five to six months                       

for approximately the next four years                

during this time                                                

by the time                                                   

at this time

Lexical richness

1.        Salmon N. salmon ['sæmən] 

          Note that the same singular and plural form of the word, oh, so can only saytwo salmon

2.        pebbly Riverbed               

3.        reed N. 

4.        Upper Reaches                  

5.        Hatch into                          

6.        migrate v. 

7.        Open Sea                            

8.        anew adv. 

9.        Pass through                         

10.    maturity.

11.    aquatic adj. 

12.    freshwater. adj

13.    saltwater N.  adj. salty water     

Syntax diversity and accuracy

    IELTS writing exam, essay scores are usually able to use a variety of complex grammatical structures, then we have to analyze together what this essay in sentence structure.

Use word

Salmon Life begin as eggs on a pebbly Riverbed, hidden Among Reeds in the SLOW-Moving Upper Reaches of a river. (word structure when adverbial, attention active and passive relationship between it and the subject of the sentence, the decision in the end is the present participle or past participle.)

Use clause

Adverbial clause

- By the time Salmon Fifteen centimeters to reach twelve, They are termed 'smolt'.

- In summary, the Salmon passes through Three distinct physical stages as it Grows to maturity.

Attributive

- After Five years at the Salmon Will Sea have grown to Adult size , Which is BETWEEN Seventy and Seventy-Six centimetres.  

- They then begin Swimming back to Their Birthplace , where They Will Lay Their eggs, and the Cycle stars anew.

  (Underlined word to be modified)

Subject clause

- It is Noteworthy That the first Two stages of this fish 's Life Occur in a freshwater Environment , while the Third Stage is lived in saltwater.

  (Underlined main language clauses; in addition, by the conjunctions while boot compound sentences)